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Some people believe that watching sport is a waste of leisure time.do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that looking at
sportif
exhibiting or calling for sportsmanship or fair play
sporting
 competitions is just
time
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 lost and it would be better to practice a
sport
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 at that
time
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.I think one benefit in watching
sport
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 is that brings people together. Another benefit is that it makes people
to work
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work
 hard to improve themselves, to be better.
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, I do not agree the idea that viewing
sport
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 is a wasted
time
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.
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,
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,
sportif
exhibiting or calling for sportsmanship or fair play
sporting
 competitions
are
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is
 an extraordinary opportunity for people to bond because while watching the players, they forgot about the misunderstandings between them.Their only purpose is to encourage the favourite team or player.
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, in antiquity
,
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,
wars were stopped and
wariors
someone engaged in or experienced in warfare
warriors
 joined together the watch the
Olimpics
the modern revival of the ancient games held once every 4 years in a selected country
Olympics
.
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,
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,
watching their favourite player
,
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,
people want to accomplish the same goals as their idol or even beyond him.
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, they are working harder to attain the
skilsrequired
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 to
pursuit
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pursue
pursuing
 their dream.
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,
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,
there are a large number of children who became extraordinary players because
thei
people in general
they
there
 were inspired by one the
sportif
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sport if
 watched during a competition. In conclusion, I disagree
that is
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 not
worthing
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
writing
waiting
 to watch
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sport
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sports
 because is just a consumer of
time
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.It can attract people together, it can make them work harder so that, one day
,
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,
they might have the opportunity to participate in a
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compilation
compulsion
 and not just to be an
obser
someone who abuses
abuser
obese
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