Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that voluntary services like charity, cleaning the

neighborhood

a surrounding or nearby region

neighbourhood

, imparting knowledge to the underprivileged, etc.

should

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Should

be made mandatory in the high

school

curriculum. I strongly agree to

this

as it not only helps in students becoming socially responsible adults but

also

in shaping their character.

Firstly

, community service inculcates a sense of responsibility towards the society, something

that is

needed to shape a good society.

For instance

, the introduction of

Swatch Bharath scheme

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the Swatch Bharath scheme

a Swatch Bharath scheme

in my

school

, The Hyderabad Public

School

, ten years ago taught me not only to keep the surroundings of the

school

clean but

also

to never litter wherever I go.

Hence

, now I feel responsible to maintain cleanliness everywhere.

Such

services are needed to develop a better society in the future.

Secondly

, voluntary services

cater

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caters

to the overall character development of an individual. It inculcates a feeling of empathy in

children which

Accept comma addition

children, which

is needed to build a better character.

For example

, an alumnus of Montessori High

School

, who indulged in petty law-breaking activities during

school

confessed that it was the charity service that he did in high

school

; which engraved deep ideas and thoughts in his mind; helped him in becoming a better person

for

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his family and refrained him from committing socially irresponsible acts.

Thus

such

voluntary activities teach us to value what we have and in turn contributes to our personality development. That being said, we cannot deny the fact that many students misuse the time allocated for these services by considering it as an excursion to enjoy with friends rather than a learning experience. In conclusion,

although

compulsory voluntary community service has its drawbacks, it is still useful in shaping a child as a socially responsible citizen and

also

in their overall personality development.

Therefore

, pupils should be encouraged to involve themselves in

such

activities.

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unpaid community service
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neighborhood improvement
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empathy
social justice
transferable skills
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leadership
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civic engagement
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