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Despite the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

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People around the world still suffer from hunger despite advancements in agriculture.
This
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 seemingly contradictory situation leaves us mulling over the possible reasons that lie behind. It is pretty obvious that one of the main reasons for
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 predicament has to do with the management and distribution of foods. Unequal distribution of income
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food
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 purchasing power might be the main reason why many people still suffer from
food
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 shortage.
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 leaves us with a unique situation
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of, on
 one
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hand, having
 people who are suffering from obesity due to excessive
food
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 consumption,
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, having people who are starving to death because of a lack of
food
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 availability. Another vital reason for
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 conundrum is the inefficient management of agricultural products. By management, I meant use, recycle, and preservation of perishable agricultural products. In any wealthy family more often than
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not, more
food
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 is cooked than necessary. If you examine a dustbin you would probably see lots of foods are wasted that should be consumed. If people all over the world were
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a more miser
 about wasting foods than the situation could be a lot better. To redress
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 problem I think it is imperative that the income gap be minimized. Governments should take steps to redistribute income in a
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more even
 manner among general people. People, in general, should be more informed about the scarcity of foods so that everyone use/consume
food
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 more discreetly. Perishable
food
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 products should be kept in a more efficient way so that no
food
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 is wasted. The concerned regulatory body can set an upper limit of
food
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 products that a single consumer can purchase. Even though
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 strategy may seem a bit extreme,
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, should be implemented if necessary. To
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conclude, I
 would say that the problem of
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 shortage may seem paradoxical, given the fact that the production of
foods
benefit
goods
 has risen significantly over the years, with appropriate actions it can be solved.
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