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leaders

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Leaders

paying attention to arts and value it could never be a negative

poin

a geometric element that has position but no extension

point

pain

phone

under any

cercumstands

a condition that accompanies or influences some event or activity

circumstance

circumstances

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however there

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However, there

However there

might be some other important issue in the country,

such

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helth

a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease

health

heath

care, education, housing and some other

crusial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

subjects but

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subjects, but

not paying attention to the art is just going to be another serious problem in the near future.

speacially

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Especially

Specially

Speacially

for children who are going to rule the country in a short period of time in the future.

when

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When

children get to learn any different form of

atr

after a negative statement used as an intensive meaning something like 'likewise' or 'also'

either

they're going to be more delicate people in everyday life so they're going to be better managers and better leaders and that's what a great

society

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need.

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the other hand not spending time and money for arts and not let our children

to get

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get

art's

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art

classes make our

society

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rogh

having or caused by an irregular surface

rough

one in the future. A

comunity

a group of people living in a particular local area

community

with no

sence

a general conscious awareness

sense

of art is just like a big army camp in that people

don't spread

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doesn't spread

love and just try to do their jobs

correcly

in an accurate manner

correctly

. So is that we are looking for?

ofcourse

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Of course

Ofcourse

can not

cannot

be the ideal place

for

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live that we all are

acpected

generally approved or compelling recognition

accepted

expected

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the way I

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

the more we spend money in arts the better place to live our country will be. It is crystal clear that you can not see the

resuls

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

results

in a short

time but

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time, but

after a couple of decades when the

blossome

reproductive organ of angiosperm plants especially one having showy or colorful parts

blossom

blossoms

of tender people is

flowreshed

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flourishing

flourished

in the

society

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everyone will enjoy living in that place.

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the

end I

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end, I

should

emphesis

give extra weight to (a communication)

emphasise

emphasize

emphasis

not only

spendeing

the act of spending or disbursing money

spending

money on

arts

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the arts

necessary but

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necessary, but

also

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it is one of the most

relyable

worthy of reliance or trust

reliable

reliably

ways to take a

counrty

a politically organized body of people under a single government

country

to the best possible level of mental health in the

society

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. I hope everyone

pay

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pays

more attention

about

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this

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issue.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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