The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The question of whether or not a
university
or similar schools
such
as technical institutions could provide the relevant qualities needed for true
success
in present day life is often debatable. In my own view, both institutions aid
success
by equipping students with the required skills and the needed qualities.
To begin
with, the
university
is a carefully designed institution that creates an enabling environment, where students could receive knowledge, trainings as well as sound character building. All these translate as a matter of fact into making them better poised for
success
in life. Based on my knowledge, I can safely
concluded
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conclude
that
most successful individuals
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the most successful individuals
in my country, Nigeria,
for
example are
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example, are
people who attended one institution of higher learning or the other, where they are able to garner skills and qualities required to clinch
success
in their different endeavours. An online study I came across recently
also
buttresses
this
point after concluding that a person's
success
is directly related to his or her level of education. Another compelling reason I believe that similar institutions
such
as a Technical
university
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university, for
for
example might
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example, might
be able to position one for
success
is that, many of the these schools have recently been able to incorporate entrepreneurship into their curriculum.
This
compulsory aspect of learning in
such
schools ensures that the graduates learn a lot about how to create businesses and run it profitably independent of government. As an example, the oldest technical
university
located in my home town is reputed for churning out graduates who do not depend on the government for employment, but
are
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is
rather employers of labour themselves, owing to the crucial entrepreneurial qualities inculcated into them,
whileat
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while at
the school.
This
has, in no small measure, facilitated their
success
in my opinion. In conclusion
,
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,
I would state that
citadels
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the citadels
of higher education are vitally important in positioning graduates for a successful life, in my view, especially when they
also
gain knowledge on how to become employers of labour.
Therefore
, it is imperative that government at all levels should support these schools.
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