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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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At present, International
tourism
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 is considered the biggest source of income in the world.
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, global touring creates more conflicts rather than harmony between people from different
background
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. In my opinion, I disagree that international
tourism
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 generates more troubles between people from different
background
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 as it will greatly benefit both individual and countries. A good reason for promoting global
tourism
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 is that it will positively strengthen the ties between both countries and individuals. Currently, universal
tourism
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 is considered one of the biggest, and most influential business in the world.
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 would lead most of the countries around the world to have good relations with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 in order to protect
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 source of income.
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, around three-quarters of the tourists who came to Egypt are driving from the USA so
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 the relationship between Egypt and the USA is so strong in the meantime. Another point to consider is that global touring will result in helping the individuals to know each other’s
cultures
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culture
, and lowering the racism rate between people from different
background
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.
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, if there is an individual who gets to know the traditional custom of a certain kind of people;
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 will help him or her to accept it if they saw someone is wearing it in their community.
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 can be used to promote harmony and to abolish the racist outlook between people from different
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.
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, universal
tourism
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 is
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 beneficial because it will result in developing social contacts between people.
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, one of my friends participated in a competition that allows him to visit the USA with other people from 12 different countries.
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 helped him to increase his social networks and to know the conventional lifestyles of those people.
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, one of those people invited him to spend a week at his home. In conclusion,
global
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globally
globe
 touring is a must for any country that wants to reinforce the ties between other nations.
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, international
tourism
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 will bring greater rewards to individuals in terms of their
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and social life.
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