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Although parents are responsible for rising a child, outside influence play a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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parents
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Parents
 and surrounding environment play a significant role in psychology and physical growth of a
child
.
Majority
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The majority
 of the people opine that only family have
crucial effect
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a crucial effect
crucial effects
 on
child's growth
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a child's growth
.
However
 a section of society
believe
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believes
 that real life experience
bring
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brings
 them up. In my point of view parents develop a strong character in a
child
.
This
 essay intends to elaborate both the aspects along with
conclusion
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a conclusion
the conclusion
.
To begin
 with, parents are the
first
 teacher of a
child
 as they give moral values and teach them the ability to distinguish between wrong and right, how to give respect and how to treat with others.
Moreover
, children
follows
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follow
 their parents that try to mimic them so they are more responsible
to
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for
 bringing up. Love and attention from parents develop a strong character in a
child
.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, the sense of family, relationship, responsibility and punctuality are instilled in a
child
 by parents and it plays an influential role on their maturity.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
to become a complete human we need to study in a school, interact with teachers and neighbours, have friends, learn from our environment all those factors have crucial roles to play in a
child
's life. Outside from home children
encounte
come together
encounter
 several
kind
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kinds
 of situations that teach them how to solve their own problems. To conclude, parents have a huge impact on Children's overall development as compared to
outside environment
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the outside environment
 because children
first
 learn from their family.
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