In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities . Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There are split opinions regarding to spend large sum of
money
. Some people
believes
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believe
that
money
should be spend
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should be spent
on constructing new
railways
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railway
lines for fast trains between
cities whereas
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cities, whereas
another group of thinker support that
money
should be spent on improving existing public
transport
.
However
, both
has
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have
its own pros and cons.
Therefore
, before commenting on my views, both the opinions would be discussed. Examine the former opinion, the primary argument the supporters
would forward is
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would forward be
modern technology has
power
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the power
to change the map of traffic. Due to traffic people on
a
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an
average two to three hours
waste
serving no useful purpose; having no excuse for being
wasted
. If we use metro trains which has so many advantages
such
as Eco-friendly, cheaper or economical. Apart from that trains
also
have solar panels which generate the electricity and provide to the grid.
we
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We
are
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
in the generation where facing many challenges against pollution. Construction of the trains
provide
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provides
the advantage of less time consumption as well as less accidental possibility
.
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.
On the other, we discuss about present public
transport
facilities. They are many flaws in that. There were constructed in 1900's and
totally different situation
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a totally different situation
. If we spent the
money
on improving existing public
transport
they
might be solve
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might solve
little
problems but
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problems, but
after all we need more
railways
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railway
tracks. The existing traffic
have
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has
some serious problems.
Thus
, to conclude the
topic I
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topic, I
would say that spent the
money
on the construction of railway lines for
metro
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the metro
, bullet trains
is
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are
much better idea than spent
money
on the improving of the existing public
transport
.
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