Punishing murderers with death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder.therefore life in prisonmement is a better punishment for murder.to what extent do you agreee

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Over the years

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murderers are sentenced to death

as a result

of capital offence committed.

this

Suggestion

This

act cannot change them and can affect the Society negatively.

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is in

this

context I

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context, I

shall strongly go against

this

Firstly

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murderer sometimes

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murderer, sometimes

do not have insight to what they do at the moment they are

commuting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

the offence

this

might

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

due to the fact that they are under drugs or acting on the effect of alcohol. When all these wears off from them

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that is

when they come to realise the

offenses

a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others

offences

offence

they have committed.

However

, committing them to murder can make a country to lose people who can develop the country later in life.As all human has their own good sides.

keeping

Suggestion

Keeping

them in prison and developing their potential abilities will go a.

long

primarily temporal sense; being or indicating a relatively great or greater than average duration or passage of time or a duration as specified

Long

way in developing the country as taking their life's earlier will not change them to a better person

Furthermore

, they society will

also

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

affected negatively as the children of the murdered convict will not have a proper upbringing,

hence

posing as another threat to the society they live in.

subsequently they

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Subsequently, they

Subsequently they

might

also

follow the trend of their parents.

This

can tremendously increase the crime rate in the society. In conclusion

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I am of the strong opinion that murderers can actually contribute to the economic development from.

the

Suggestion

The

prison

of you or yourself

your

you

yard

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hence

the need for the government to reduce

death punishment

Suggestion

the death punishment

to a lesser one

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