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Some people think that a high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that a good working atmosphere is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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So many people, especially fresh graduates, are confused when deciding their career projections and choosing a
company
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 to
work
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 for. Some people think the amount of
salary
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 provided by the
company
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 should become a
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 consideration while others argue that a convenient working atmosphere should be prioritised. In
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 essay, I shall provide both
point
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points
 of views and give my personal opinion.
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 with, companies that offer a high
salary
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 usually require candidates who can take
higher level
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a higher level
higher levels
 of responsibilities. It is suitable for ambitious people who look for
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 challenges or people who have
higher standard
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a higher standard
 of living.
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, someone who has a hobby to collect luxury items.
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, workers have to know that in so many cases, there are some unavoidable conditions in
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 working
environment
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.
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, toxic and bad-tempered boss, tight schedule,
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 deadlines,
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-related stress, and sleep deprivation. If
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 condition will not bother our happiness, we can join
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rate
any of various long-tailed rodents similar to but larger than a mouse
rat
 race.
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, If I have to choose, I personally prefer working in a
company
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 with a good working atmosphere. I think if it is only about how much money people can gain, they can do
side hustle
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a side hustle
 after office hours. Nowadays, everybody can easily build online stores to get additional income. Working in a convenient
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 is beneficial,
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, employers feel more comfortable which allows them to be more creative. It is suitable for people who enjoy working
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at
 a slow pace, having an intimate relationship with co-workers, working in creative sectors,
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 it is
also
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 better for our self-development. In conclusion, choosing a
company
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 that offers a high
salary
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 or have a good
work
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environment
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 is absolutely a personal preference.
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, I believe that people can still get high income while choosing a
company
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 with
convenient
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the convenient work environment
a convenient work environment
work
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environment
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 by doing side business, so that they do not have to sacrifice their happiness in order to get
higher
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a higher salary
higher salaries
salary
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.
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