In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages

It is obvious that, the relationships of family members
is affected
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are affected
by immense changes of
individuals
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individual
individuals'
lifestyles in our whole globe.
Although
, sometimes it's impact negatively, but I believe that, the benefits of
this
development outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, It is true that, we are living in
modern era
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the modern era
a modern era
and our lives is getting changed by the influence of technological advancement.
As a result
, now we
passing
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pass
are passing
more time on doing virtual activities,
such
as, chatting with friends and playing games on computers or watching movies on television.
This
things
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thing
have
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has
serious problems of the bonding of families. Now people's are reluctant to spending
times
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time
with parents because we've
inclination
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the inclination
an inclination
to
browseing
reading superficially or at random
browsing
internet rather than giving time to them.
As a result
, it creates distance between brothers and sisters, as well parents and their children.
Therefore
, the rapid alternation of
lifestyles
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lifestyle
causes
depart
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departs
the connection of an individual from their family.
On the contrary
, by the using of technology most of the nation became developed. Nowadays we
are easily conduct
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are easily conducting
have easily conducted
easily conduct
our business by monitoring it through
internet
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the internet
or computer which is much easier than before.
For example
, E-commerce is one of the most popular online trade market, which helps
to
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in
with
the development of our life.
In addition
, people can earn money by using a mobile phone through outsourcing. Another
positiveness
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positive
is that, we could collect travel around the world in
short period
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a short period
of which have
impact
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an impact
impacts
on quick change of our lives. In conclusion, By the betterment of our life, it's assist us to get
comfort
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comfortable
comfy
.As a consequence, the advantages of switching our styles of life overcome
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographic separation
  • economic advancement
  • technological advancements
  • face-to-face interactions
  • egalitarian structures
  • gender roles
  • traditional roles
  • work demands
  • financial stability
  • access to education
  • healthcare
  • cultural shifts
  • traditions
  • cultural identity
  • family heritage
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