Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

First it
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First, it
was the mail, than the telephone,
then
the mobile phones and more recently smartphones and the omnipresence of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
that changed the way people interact.
Although
each
tecnology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
brough
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
some kind of change, the latest might be the boldest one, as
instead
of simply facilitating conversations it might be ending or
structurely
with respect to structure
structurally
changing them.
This
essay will discuss if
this
is a positive or negative trend and what impacts can it pose to modern society. One can argue that socializing digitally increases ones reach as well as how fast they can contact their
destinatery
.
Accept space
.
That is
certainly true as with a smartphone in
hand anyone
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hand, anyone
can literally talk to dozens of people across the globe
immediatelly
without delay or hesitation; with no time intervening
immediately
and simultaneously. They can send pictures, videos, recordings or event
join
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joins
online games together making it truly multimedia. Having that power in hand is exciting and should make anyone feel more connected and socialized than ever. But are people really paying attention? Are they
dialogueing
or just talking?
On the other hand
, if people don't meet and talk in a traditional way they should be loosing something. It is known from
neurolinguistics
and forensics that eye to eye
comunication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
sends far more information than just words or sentences. The tone of the voice, the contraction of
face
Suggestion
facial
muscles are all key elements in communication.
Also
, in a digital text-based interaction one can never be sure if they are being "heard" and if the other person is processing
thair
of them or themselves
their
"saying" or just scrolling through it.
Although
not a trivial conclusion, going digital seems to be more negative than positive when it relates to socializing. Some dimensions of conversation
is being lost
Suggestion
are being lost
and turning the information flow weaker and shallower than before. With the excess of information and simultaneous chats it is likely that people are learning, teaching and expressing their feelings less effectively and will need to balance speed and access versus quality and depth if they really want to socialize and have friends
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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