You recently bought a new piece of technology for your home. Your friend is interested in purchasing the same item. Write a letter to your friend. •Explain what the technology is. •Describe how it is helpful to you. •Give your advice on whether your friend should buy it or not.

Dear Amrit, How are you? I hope you've been well. I recently got your letter in which you mentioned that you are
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interested in buying a
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for your house safety
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you are away. As you already know, the CCTV
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I purchased from the Lorex company is magnificently good
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it's handy as well. There have been many cases of robbery in my locality, and that's when I decided to buy a
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for the house
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personal safety. Considering the quality of
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, it is the best choice I have ever made because you can clearly see the face of
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person in the video.
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, it came with two years of warranty, so all the repairs are free of cost for the next two years. I definitely recommend you to purchase the Lorex company's CCTV
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because they are specifically built to keep our house safe. Oh, there is one thing I forgot to mention earlier
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they are waterproof as well. Interestingly, I am free
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Saturday, we both should go to buy the
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as I even have a discount coupon which they gave me with my recent purchase. I can't wait to see you. Your friend, Simran

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use paragraph breaks clearly, especially between the main points.
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Add a few more details about how the camera works or features it has to provide more information.
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The letter has a friendly tone which is great for writing to a friend.
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You clearly explain why the camera is helpful for home safety.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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