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in many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. it is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
It is often argued by some people that smoking should be permitted in places
such
 as restaurant and shopping malls,
therefore
 most countries banned smoking in public places. I strongly agree with the above theses, since smoking
not only affect
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doesn't only affect
 the individual itself but
also
 the people surrounding him.
First
 of all, cigarettes
is
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are
 the main reason of various severe and deadly diseases, where it
can
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can also jeopardize
also
 jeopardizes the
health
 of
second
 hand smokers.
In other words
, some individuals are not supposed to be located in places where there is smoking to prevent their
health
 from getting any worse.
For instance
, a patient who is recovering or still doing some medical therapy is supposed to always take precautions, meaning to choose healthy places with a good environment to maintain a good
health
.
Consequently
, allowing people to smoke everywhere and anywhere is considered as invading other people’s
health
.
Second
 of all, places where all
kind
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kinds
 of
smoking including
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smoking, including
 Narguile is permitted, are not family friendly locations. To explain
this
 fact in other terms, both
baby
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babies
 born and small children should not be exposed to the nicotine and chemical substances that arise from cigarettes, not only it can affect their
health but
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health, but
also
 will gradually have a negative and irreversible impact on
brains
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brain
 cells for individual who are still in maturing stages.
This
 fact is evidenced by a recent research where statistics show that 60% of high intellectual kids come from non-smoking families. In conclusion, smoking in
public area
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a public area
public areas
 is not just a personal opinion, rather it is
also
have
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having
has
 a high effect on
second
 smokers where both their
health
 and intelligence are in danger.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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