in many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. it is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued by some people that smoking should be permitted in places

such

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as restaurant and shopping malls,

therefore

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most countries banned smoking in public places. I strongly agree with the above theses, since smoking

not only affect

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doesn't only affect

the individual itself but

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the people surrounding him.

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of all, cigarettes

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are

the main reason of various severe and deadly diseases, where it

can

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can also jeopardize

also

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jeopardizes the

health

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second

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hand smokers.

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, some individuals are not supposed to be located in places where there is smoking to prevent their

health

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from getting any worse.

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, a patient who is recovering or still doing some medical therapy is supposed to always take precautions, meaning to choose healthy places with a good environment to maintain a good

health

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, allowing people to smoke everywhere and anywhere is considered as invading other people’s

health

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of all, places where all

kind

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kinds

smoking including

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smoking, including

Narguile is permitted, are not family friendly locations. To explain

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fact in other terms, both

baby

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babies

born and small children should not be exposed to the nicotine and chemical substances that arise from cigarettes, not only it can affect their

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health but

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health, but

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will gradually have a negative and irreversible impact on

brains

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brain

cells for individual who are still in maturing stages.

This

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fact is evidenced by a recent research where statistics show that 60% of high intellectual kids come from non-smoking families. In conclusion, smoking in

public area

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a public area

public areas

is not just a personal opinion, rather it is

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have

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having

has

a high effect on

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smokers where both their

health

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and intelligence are in danger.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

secondhand smoke
respiratory problems
cardiovascular disease
clean air
public health
hospital admissions
economic benefits
smoking cessation
cultural shift
healthcare costs
smoke-free laws
enforcement
designated smoking areas
compliance
social attitudes

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in many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. it is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

Some individuals say that the main environmental issue of our time is the loss of particular types of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

in their advertising,businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products ar new in some way. why is this?do you think it isa positive ornegative developement?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.