Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a women's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. What opinion do you agree and why?
A few individuals claim that
women
should focus on household task
and Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
upbringing
of their Correct article usage
the upbringing
children
. Whereas
more liberal minded
people believe that Add a hyphen
liberal-minded
women
should have same
rights as men to do work and achieve their goals. I strongly agree with liberal Correct article usage
the same
minded
public. Correct word choice
liberal-minded
This
essay will discuss the reasons for this
notion with examples.
To embark
with, Verb problem
begin
women
who indulge in official work,
can raise their Remove the comma
apply
children
effectively as other females do. Because part -time
and online job opportunities have been provided by various corporate organizations. Correct your spelling
part-time
For example
, Child
Care Association has revealed that working Correct article usage
the Child
women
are equally efficient in taking care of their pupils as housewives due to
short
span of working hours. Correct article usage
the short
Therefore
, it is incoherent to say that having a career compromises a mother's ability to bringing
up her child.
Scrutinizing Wrong verb form
bring
further
, job
gives monetary benefits to the family which will be helpful in raising the economic and social status of family members. Add an article
the job
a job
Moreover
, If women
do job
, they will contribute Add an article
the job
a job
in
providing better education to their Change preposition
to
children
. As both
Correct word choice
Both
the
parents have different sources of income. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
,USA residents have 80 percent of working parents, who
would have Correct pronoun usage
apply
capability
to spend money on their Change the article
the capability
children
's study
. Fix the agreement mistake
studies
It is clear that
women
not only helps
in terms of money but Change the verb form
help
also
a quintessential example for Add a missing verb
are also
the
society.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
it is clear that
working women
can handle both professional and personal life. They should be given equal rights to work in corporate
Correct article usage
the corporate
sectors
. It should be necessary to bring a change in the thinking of traditional communities.Fix the agreement mistake
sector
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points and provide closure to the essay.
task response
The essay should address both sides of the argument and provide a balanced view, considering opposing opinions.