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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. what are the advantages and disadvantages

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More and more tertiary students are moving to study abroad.
Although
 students must pay heavy fees compared to their own country, they will
also
 gain knowledge from
advanced level
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an advanced level
the advanced level
 of courses that will reward them later in their careers. The greatest benefit of studying abroad is that students can learn specialized courses that will improve their educational path that would have been
otherwise
 impossible if they had
have
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had
 only studied in their own countries. Students will get exposure to learn new concepts to enhance their skills in
specific area
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specific areas
a specific area
 as per the latest trends.
For example
, when I studied in Germany as a twenty-years old I experienced more advanced techniques of pursuing the modules. The course structure and content was based on advanced methods and emphasized more on practical classes. These high defined courses are paradoxically the main advantage of studying overseas because they help to shape your skills to
next level
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the next level
. The main challenges that students will face while oversea will usually stem from course fees. These educational expenses can pose massive obstacles for people because they require
huge amount
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a huge amount
 of money which can often be a burden for middle class students.
For instance
, while studying in Germany I took
student loan
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a student loan
 to pay my educational fees. Many times, I felt helpless due to financial issue, and I longed to do part time job to sustain the other costs.
Therefore
, cost is a major drawback for students studying abroad as
its
it is
it's
vey
used as an intensifier
very
 expensive. To conclude, There are a significant number of students going abroad
for
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to
 study
.
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.
while
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While
 students will no doubt experience world class education despite the challenges of increasing education costs. Despite having financial hardships to study overseas for financial education the benefits the students gain by pursuing
advance
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advanced
couses
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
cases
causes
 will be much more beneficial
.
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