Government money should be used to support children in school for sports rather than to support professional sports and ars that perfrom for the general public. To what extent do you agree ?

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Goverenment
Suggestion
Government
funds are vital for the education of sports and arts as well as
assiting
give help or assistance; be of service
assisting
exciting
associating
the
proffesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
professionals
athletes and artists. These funds are used both for maintaining the sport educational system as well as giving a salary for professional athletes and artists. In recent years, more and more peope believe that the state funds shuld be directed soley to the educational system rather than to support
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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