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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

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In the past, home remedies were considered the best way to cure a disease.
However
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,
this
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 is not the case with present mindset, as the technology has advanced in hundred folds over the past few years, these days people look for
substitues
put in the place of another; switch seemingly equivalent items
substitutes
 for
medicine
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medically
.
This
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, could have pros
such
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 as cost cutting and cons
such
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 as wrong prescription. I totally disagree with
this
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 advancement and still feel consulting doctors and getting the right medication holds a better chance to cure problems. Medication is often replaced with methods
such
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 as yoga, gym and so on.
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, these methods could refresh and relax your soul, but not solve the entire problem.
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, it could be discontinued by an individual which could show side effects in the future.
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, a person’s life is at risk by taking
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 severe unprescribed steps. Taking Indian youth
for example
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, we see that 90
percebt
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of teenagers hit the gym in order to develop rigid body. But, once
this
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 is discontinued, they gain tremendous weight and
also
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 get into depression. Another problem observed in
current generation
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the current generation
 is depression. Often people surf online or try isolating themselves to keep them happy.
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, they take self medication and go through cost free methods assuming it is a less severe disease.
This
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 is a huge mistake people commit. Mental disease is quite subtle, which is why, it needs continuous monitoring and the right set of procedures to be followed. To conclude, medication is a proven method which is tested in
laboratory
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the laboratory
a laboratory
 and is known to be successful. On one hand, it could be expensive and tiring to follow on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. But
on the other hand
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, it is known to work under all conditions and is considered as a safe bet.
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