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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara dessert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The visitors to colder countries like the Antartic (or) the Sahara has increased in the
last
 few years. There exist extreme freezing temperatures, which makes it hard for the tourist to visit these places.
However
, they attract a lot of people due to the same reason.
First
 of all, the advantages for most of the people to travel to these locations, since it offers a unique experience like the visit to polar bears, hotels which are built on snow, ice skating, snow caves, etc. In hot conditions like the Sahara, options are available to tour places like dunes, camel rides, etc.,
In addition
 to these activities, both Antartica and the Sahara
has
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have
 a diverse set of population and culture, which is interesting to learn. The ethnic wear of these places
are
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is
 quite different, and you will have options to rent those for a quick photo session as well. The food and the cuisines
for
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of
 these extreme places will offer a fulfilling experience for everyone.
Although
 it is most popular among
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
, the weather makes it deadly for anyone with health complications. It is recommended to get a fitness test completed as one of the mandatory things before travel. It is required to learn and be prepared to the warnings
before-hand
being ahead of time or need
beforehand
 as these locations are prone for high fatality rate. They are not recommended for anyone with heart disease and people
below
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under
 18 & above 50. Proper gear is required to get insulated from the cold and humid conditions. Always required meal needs to be carried as it is not readily available in these regions. To conclude, tourism has been flourishing these dangerous places for a once in a lifetime experience. It is always required to be prepared and educated
of
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about
 the danger which comes up with these places as well.
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