Many university graduates can not find a job in their chosen profession, what factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion should be done about it?

Many young people find it difficult to get a job in their chosen
fields
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field
upon graduation.
This
inability has caused fresh graduates to take up job offers in another/entirely different field and some are even forced to accept below graduate level jobs. In my opinion, the root of
this
problem lies in the outdated higher education system that should be modernised. One obvious point that resulted in graduates not being able to get jobs in their respective field is that the traditional education does not prepare students for their
first
job for a number of reasons. One of them is that many programmes are too theoretical, highly educated graduates lack simple skills required for employment.
For example
, the knowledge of IT software; employers
prefers
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prefer
candidates with hands-on experience. Another reason is that universities offer too many courses in popular fields,
such
as business, law and management and do not admit enough students for engineering and science programmes.
As a result
of
this
, the labour market has an over supply of management and law graduates and a deficit of engineers. A reform of higher education could alleviate many of the
problems but
Accept comma addition
problems, but
would require joint efforts from universities, employers of labour and the government. Universities should work
closer
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closely
with employers,
this
will avail the students to be taught practical skills that companies look for. Meanwhile, the government could develop guidelines
on
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for
the number of students to be given admission in each
subjects
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subject
in accordance with the market demand. In conclusion, to reduce the challenges faced by school leavers in getting jobs in
thier
of them or themselves
their
field, the government and
universities management
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universities, management
university's management
university's university's management
university management
should work together as a team to update the contents of courses to suit employers demand.
Furthermore
,
number
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the number
of students admitted in each school subject should be in line with the market demand.
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