People doing dangerous sport activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people tend to do scuba diving and bungee
jumping which
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jumping, which
known as a harmful sporting.They ought to be liable for their
life
,
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,
so that for saving them rescue workers should not take
risk
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risks
and I completely agree with
this
notion.
To begin
with, it is true that someone doing
risky sporting activity
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risky sporting activities
a risky sporting activity
such
as, skydiving
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as skydiving,
or scuba diving which is sometimes
could be fell
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could befall
could befell
them in danger.
Firstly
, we have the responsibility to protect our own
lives but
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lives, but
if we had played
such
things which is caused
to
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by
death or injuries our legs or bones.
However
, when we face trouble, rescue teams took the risks to save our lives and they sometimes confront with difficulties.
For example
,
last
year in
uk
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the UK
UK
a man fall
in
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into
cumbersome situations by doing
scuva
a device (trade name Aqua-Lung) that lets divers breathe under water; scuba is an acronym for self-contained underwater breathing apparatus
scuba
diving and a man who went to
rescued
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rescue
him was being dead.
Furthermore
, the worker whose duties to
saves
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save
us when we are facing problem by doing dangerous sport activities,
also
have their own lifestyle to lead it without difficulty.So, they
should not always takes
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should not always take
responsibility to guard us.
In addition
, we
have be
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have been
cautious and
sensible
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sensitive
to our
life
and abstain from
do
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doing
these kinds of terrible things as like the sports which I mentioned here.
Lastly
, everyone must have the rights to maintain their own
living which is
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living, which is
sometimes impossible for our mistakes.
Consequently
, We should avoid us to
playing
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play
this
dangerous spot which had
negative impact
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a negative impact
on other
life
. In conclusion, I believe that, if people leave themselves to
doing
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do
this
,
then
rescue team members won't need to take risk and all of us have a comfortable
life
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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