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Both poor and rich find accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that university admissions have become increasingly difficult for every economic section of society- be it rich or poor. In my opinion, while poor people face excessive difficulties in pursuing higher studies due to their financial constraints, rich genre can manage the hefty fees and can study in
an
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a
 university.
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 with, one of the major problems, economically weaker sections of society face in their admission procedures, is exorbitant fees which
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are
unaffordable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
unavoidable
 for them. Apart from fees, there are certain course requirement like laptops, academic books, educational tours and many others which
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 demand money. It was revealed by a leading magazine that only 15 percent of total university’s pupil strength comprises of financially weaker students because of their inability to manage
high fees structure
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the high fees structure
 and cost of living in the campus.
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, people who are well off in terms of money can easily afford fees and other general requirements.
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,
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 people always had an upper hand in gaining access to university education even if they are not talented enough.
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, they can eye on management seats by paying donations to college funds if they fail to score minimum entrance criteria. There was a survey conducted 2 years back by a renowned newspaper which clearly showcased that heirs of most of the wealthy people were studying in
topnotch
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top notch
 universities and 80 percent of them were major contributors towards development of college infrastructure. In conclusion, I opine that poor people face tremendous problems in gaining access to higher education owing to their financial troubles whereas wealthier ones have an edge over them in terms of opportunities. I wish universities should focus on diminishing
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 disparity by providing support to the deserving ones.

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