You have rented a house by a lake for the summer. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the house •describe how you are spending your time there •invite your friend to come and visit Begin your letter as follows: Dear………..

Hello Shahid ! I hope you are doing well . It's been
such
a long time since we
last
talked. I am writing
this
letter to share my feelings with you.
Last
week , I
have
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rented a
house
by a lake for
this
summer. It's a
single story
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house
of 400 square meters .
Area
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consist
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of 3 large bedrooms with
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an attach
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attach
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bathroom,
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central TV lounge and one fully
equiped
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equipped
kitchen . There is
small
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area on
back
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side of the building for ventilation. Sometimes, I used to sit there and have coffee. I get up early in the morning. After doing my
pray
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, I went
to
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the
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walk by the lake. When I am free from my walk, I
preferred
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to sit in the garden for half an hour. Flowers of different colours add beauty to my
house
. After
take
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care of the garden, went back to the kitchen and
have
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breakfast . If there is some assignment work , spend some time on it . In one room of the
bedrooms
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I
have
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enjoyed a
vedio
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video
game there. I know your summer
vecations
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vacations
are on the corner. I would like to invite you
come
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to my
house
for 3 or 4 days . We will have fun together. I will show you my
house
. Anxiously waiting for your reply. yours truly, ahtsham
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task achievement
Try to maintain consistency in tenses. For example, 'I used to sit there' should be 'I sit there,' to match the present continuous actions described throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear separation of ideas between paragraphs for better readability. For example, describe the house in one paragraph, your daily routine in another, and the invitation in the final paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Minor grammatical corrections are needed, such as 'with attach bathroom' should be 'with attached bathroom.' Also, 'When I am free from my walk, I preferred to sit' should be 'When I am free from my walk, I prefer to sit.'
task achievement
The letter has a warm and inviting tone, which suits the purpose of a personal letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-structured and add a personal touch to the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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