You have rented a house by a lake for the summer. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the house •describe how you are spending your time there •invite your friend to come and visit Begin your letter as follows: Dear………..
Hello Shahid ! I hope you are doing well . It's been central TV lounge and one fully
such
a long time since we last
talked. I am writing this
letter to share my feelings with you. Last
week , I have
rented a Unnecessary verb
apply
house
by a lake for this
summer.
It's a single story
Add a hyphen
single-story
house
of 400 square meters . Area
Add an article
The area
consist
of 3 large bedrooms with Change the verb form
consists
Correct article usage
an attach
attach
bathroom,Wrong verb form
attached
Correct article usage
a
equiped
kitchen . There is Correct your spelling
equipped
small
area on Add an article
a small
back
side of the building for ventilation. Sometimes, I used to sit there and have coffee.
I get up early in the morning. After doing my Add an article
the back
pray
, I went Replace the word
prayer
to
Change preposition
for
the
walk by the lake. When I am free from my walk, I Correct article usage
a
preferred
to sit in the garden for half an hour. Flowers of different colours add beauty to my Wrong verb form
prefer
house
. After take
care of the garden, went back to the kitchen and Change the verb form
taking
have
breakfast . If there is some assignment work , spend some time on it . In one room of the Wrong verb form
had
bedrooms
I Add a comma
bedrooms,
have
enjoyed a Unnecessary verb
apply
vedio
game there.
I know your summer Correct your spelling
video
vecations
are on the corner. I would like to invite you Correct your spelling
vacations
come
to my Add the particle
to come
house
for 3 or 4 days . We will have fun together. I will show you my house
.
Anxiously waiting for your reply.
yours truly,
ahtshamSubmitted by muhammadahtsham457 on
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task achievement
Try to maintain consistency in tenses. For example, 'I used to sit there' should be 'I sit there,' to match the present continuous actions described throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear separation of ideas between paragraphs for better readability. For example, describe the house in one paragraph, your daily routine in another, and the invitation in the final paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Minor grammatical corrections are needed, such as 'with attach bathroom' should be 'with attached bathroom.' Also, 'When I am free from my walk, I preferred to sit' should be 'When I am free from my walk, I prefer to sit.'
task achievement
The letter has a warm and inviting tone, which suits the purpose of a personal letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-structured and add a personal touch to the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite