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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

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It is becoming prevalent among people around the globe to
setup
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set up
 small size families
instead
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 of large ones.
This
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 arrangement could result to less feeding expenses for parents and good quality of education for the children,
however
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, there are some drawbacks to
this
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 type of family. On the one hand, it is advantageous for parents financially and a child's education. For one
parents
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parent
 have less feeding cost to incur which could help save more money for other needs of the family.
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, each member of the family gets enough educational support.
For example
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, a couple with just a child would want to send their child to a good quality school because they could contribute financially towards
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 goal,
thus
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 showing clearly the merits of a small family.
Conversely
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, parents in small families could be over protective and children could become reluctant to be without their parents. In the fist place, parents could become over protective that children would no longer be able
to to
in the direction of
to
 explore the world on their own or even play with others by themselves.
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 to
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, children could become so attached to their parents till their adulthood, which may result
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in
 children finding it difficult to stay alone without the parents being around the.
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, it shows that a small family arrangement
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has
 some negatives. To conclude,
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 having a family with
small number
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a small number
 of members has some upsides, the over protection by parents towards children and the close attachment of children to their parents are seen to be the downsides to the small family arrangement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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