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Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.

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Workers can be motivated to
work
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 by giving them longer breaks. I believe that
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 the high performance could be attained with adequate leave entitlement at
work
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, yet it must be with certain limits.
This
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first
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 discuss the policy of enough holidays are important to enhance job satisfaction and performance and
then
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 discuss why
it
it is
it's
 important to maintain leaves within
certain period
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a certain period
.
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 with, the contentment among employees will increase, as they can enjoy the sufficient long breaks from the office
work
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. An employed person at average works 9-5 and has little time to relax and enjoy which will eventually create resentment and de-motivation. If employed individuals get enough time to relax, they feel contented and
work
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 with more dedication and determination.
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, the company will achieve the desired outlook and goals.
For instance
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, according to survey concluded by Apple Inc,
the high
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 salaries and better positions do not alone give
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 satisfaction, enough annual holidays are
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 included in it.
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, it can be
ignored that
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ignored, that
 extended off days from the
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 will cost a lot to
company’s business
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the company’s business
a company’s business
 and
country’s economy
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the country’s economy
a country’s economy
. The provision of long leaves will be ineffective, if workers are at holding important position,
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 as, Judges in
courtroom
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the courtroom
a courtroom
courtrooms
 and consultant
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with
 offices. Another aspect of taking long leaves is that it becomes difficult for workers to concentrate on
work
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 after a long discontinuation in
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work
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worker
 routine. They cannot evade themselves from the period of enjoyment and relaxation, and
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 it took time to adapt to
work
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 environment. In conclusion, I believe that
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although
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despite
 the better
work
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 performance and productivity of staff member cannot be ensured unless enough holidays are provided, long holidays could have negative impacts.
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, it is important to set them within some reasonable limits.
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