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Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.

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Workers can be motivated to
work
 by giving them longer breaks. I believe that
although
 the high performance could be attained with adequate leave entitlement at
work
, yet it must be with certain limits.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the policy of enough holidays are important to enhance job satisfaction and performance and
then
 discuss why
it
it is
it's
 important to maintain leaves within
certain period
Suggestion
a certain period
.
To begin
 with, the contentment among employees will increase, as they can enjoy the sufficient long breaks from the office
work
. An employed person at average works 9-5 and has little time to relax and enjoy which will eventually create resentment and de-motivation. If employed individuals get enough time to relax, they feel contented and
work
 with more dedication and determination.
Consequently
, the company will achieve the desired outlook and goals.
For instance
, according to survey concluded by Apple Inc,
the high
Suggestion
higher
 salaries and better positions do not alone give
work
 satisfaction, enough annual holidays are
also
 included in it.
However
, it can be
ignored that
Accept comma addition
ignored, that
 extended off days from the
work
 will cost a lot to
company’s business
Suggestion
the company’s business
a company’s business
 and
country’s economy
Suggestion
the country’s economy
a country’s economy
. The provision of long leaves will be ineffective, if workers are at holding important position,
such
 as, Judges in
courtroom
Suggestion
the courtroom
a courtroom
courtrooms
 and consultant
in
Suggestion
with
 offices. Another aspect of taking long leaves is that it becomes difficult for workers to concentrate on
work
 after a long discontinuation in
work
Suggestion
worker
 routine. They cannot evade themselves from the period of enjoyment and relaxation, and
thus
 it took time to adapt to
work
 environment. In conclusion, I believe that
although
Suggestion
despite
 the better
work
 performance and productivity of staff member cannot be ensured unless enough holidays are provided, long holidays could have negative impacts.
Therefore
, it is important to set them within some reasonable limits.
Submitted by imsara.batool on

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