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*Some people say that shops should sell food products that are made in the local area whenever possible rather than foods that are imported from other countries* . _Do you agree or disagree?_ Give reasons from your answer and include any relevant examples from your iwn knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is believed by some that stores in the
country
 should trade in locally produced foods while other people believe
such
 items should be imported.
Consequently
, it is my opinion that daily consumables should be manufactured and sold in stores due to the reduced of production, easy access do raw materials and the attendant rise in the
country
's economic growth.
To begin
 with, food products when made in the
country
 are at lower costs. These
translates
Suggestion
translate
 into a cheaper selling price for consumers who are the final beneficiaries of
these process
Suggestion
this process
these processes
.
In addition
, there are easy channels for manufacturers to get the inputs required to turn them into marketable forms.
For instance
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 recently switched from buying foreign baby cereal for my children when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 found a cheaper alternative, which is not only cheap and nutritious but indeed made in my locality. Another point to consider in supporting sales of locally made foods is the possible effects it will have on the
country
's gross domestic product. Manufacturing would encourage exportation.
As a result
, there would be an influx of buyers from other Climes who would be willing to pay in foreign currencies. These would in turn boost the growth and
standard
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the standard
 of living of citizens.
For example
, A recent publication by the National Bureau of statistics revealed that, an 80% export is needed to lift Nigeria out of recession. To conclude, In my view, sales of locally produced food products will not only lead to an increase in the economy, but would
also
 be beneficial to farmers due to the ease with which raw materials can be sought.
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