Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, we have witnessed a rising

levels

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level

violence

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among different demographics of society. Some people link

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trend to the increase intensity of violent scenes shown on

media

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the media

. I will argue throughout

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essay why I completely agree with

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opinion and I will discuss the hazardous outcomes of the continuation of

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phenomena. Criminal records have recently reached unprecedented numbers in decades.

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, people from different societies have been complaining

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about

the growth of aggression seen amongst different age groups since movies had escalated the quantity of cruel scenes. The connection between the inflation of

number

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the number

a number

of crimes and

violence

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presented in

theaters

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

theatres

stems from the thrill feeling a viewer tends to pick after watching

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clips.

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New York Police Department

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the New York Police Department

recorded the highest statistical crime numbers short after The Godfathers movie was released in

theaters

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatres

in 1972. Students

dropout

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drop out

school

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due to aggressive

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

have lately become a considerable issue facing certain societies. Scrutinizing the causality behind

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norm has found that among

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particular group of students, movies and TV shows with high number of offence and

misdemeanor

a crime less serious than a felony

misdemeanour

misdemeanours

were more accessed. Not only their misconduct was taken a place within

school

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perimeters, but

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also their parents were

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their parents were also

struggling with their children’s bad temper at home.

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more synchronized efforts of both families and schools to tackle

this

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problem have been put, the propensity of

school

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dropout due to offensive

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

continues to rise.

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essay has argued that people who relate social

violence

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to the inclination of

objective media use

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the objective media use

of aggression have a sound argument. In my opinion, loosened access to

violence

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of specifically young adults stands behind the growth of ferocious

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

among

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age group.

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unfortunately may lead to dangerous outcomes

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as more committed felonies and

school

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dropouts.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

media influence
desensitization
mimic
impressionable
copycat phenomenon
aggression
correlational
causal link
violent crime rates
educational role
glorification
cultural norms
social factors
community norms
regulatory measures
broadcasting restrictions
content rating systems

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