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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Advancements in science
is expected
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are expected
 to prolong the
livespan
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
 of people. It is argued by some people that
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 is a good development, while others do not agree with
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 notion.
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 it will make
life
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 more productive, I believe that a longer
life
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 will be expensive. On the one hand, some people believe that
life
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 would be more productive when people live for up to 100 or 200 years.
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, people would be able to maintain a healthy
life
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 for a longer period of
time
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 which would
affford
be able to spare or give up
afford
 them the energy and
time
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 to work for a long period of
time
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 in active service and achieve more of their goals.
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, when people start to live for about 150 years, the general retirement age would increase and people would work for a much longer period of
time
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.
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, it is anticipated that many people would be able to accomplish their goals and expectations in their lifetime.
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, some people have the opinion that the cost of living would drastically increase when the
life
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 of people become lengthened by science.
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 is because there would be
population explosion
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a population explosion
 on the planet, which would increase the pressure on the available resources
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 as water, food, accommodation, transportation and health care. More so, there would be a rise in the population of the senior citizens and the cost of social welfare.
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, the working population would be heavily taxed.
This
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 would ultimately cause a fall in the standard of living on earth. In conclusion,
although
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 the possibility of science prolonging human
life
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 would make our
life
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 more productive.
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, it would make the cost of living exorbitant for people to live
comfortable
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comfortably
. On the balance, I am of the view that it is not a good thing.

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