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In some countries, children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

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Children around the world are protected by
law
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. Some nations banned children below 16 years of age from leaving
school
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 for a full-time
work
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. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
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 is a good idea as it reduces illiteracy
level
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 and increases
productivity
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.
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 with, I believe that enacting
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law
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laws
a law
the law
 to hinder from stopping
school
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 to get full-time
work
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 is a good development because it increases literacy
level
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. Ensuring that all children get educated helps to improve reading and writing ability which aids proper development of the country. Instituting strict
law
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 helps produce educationally sound children and makes information dissemination easy for the government. A survey carried out by United nations on
Nige republic
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the Nige republic
 in 2004 reveals that Nige republic had the highest
level
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 of illiterate in
africa
the second largest continent; located to the south of Europe and bordered to the west by the South Atlantic and to the east by the Indian Ocean
Africa
 because their children stop schooling at a tender age to fend for a living. In order to improve the education standard of a nation, basic education should be made mandatory.
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,
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I tend to agree that it is beneficial for children to remain in
school
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instead
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 of seeking for a full-time job as it aids
productivity
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. Acquiring basic knowledge
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of
 the children before moving into labour market prepare them physically, mentally and in all aspects.
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,
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 improves
productivity
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 and helps children perform maximally at
work
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.
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, it was discovered by the ministry of trade in Nigeria in 2006 that educationally inclined personnel performed better than the uneducated.
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, advocating for children to remain in
school
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 till they are 16 helps them get the rudiments of professionalism. In conclusion, I believe that it is a good idea for children to be in
school
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 by
law
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instead
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 of getting a full-time
work
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 because it could possibly
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reduce
 illiteracy
level
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 and increases
productivity
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 in a society.
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