Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and opinion.

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Nowadays, living independent is getting popular among the youngsters. While some people inspire young adults to live away from hometown for higher education or work, others insist that children should stay under their guidance. In my opinion, living an independent
live
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life
along with the
support
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of the family members will help youngsters to widen their horizon. Parents who
support
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their offspring stay
independently
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independent
after a certain age believe that it helps them to become
strong
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stronger
as they start taking their decisions on their own (IDEA1). They
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don't only cook
their own food or meals and wash their utensils, but
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make new friends and acquaintances.
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, staying away from family adds the responsibility to manage their own finances by engaging in
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pre
-time jobs and look after their savings from an early age which help them in the long run.
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, some people opine that children should stay at home and grow-up with the
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of family members. Children learn love and sympathy from grandparents, discipline from parents and collaboration from siblings.
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is often not possible when they live away from the hometown.
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of both sides).
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, staying home provides them safe and positive atmosphere which is suitable for other overall development of the child.
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, youngsters have a fear of elders and their parents,
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prevents them from indulgence in unwanted activities like smoking and drinking.
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, staying with parents helps as parents often manage finances through their monthly income.
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, even though I entered adulthood year ago I live with my parents since they provide financial
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,
this
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allows me to stay free from economic burden and focus on my college studies In conclusion,
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living with family has
money
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many
positive impacts, in my opinion, young ones in the family should encouraged to live an independent life in order to evolve as a better person.
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