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Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#people #system #teachers #students #classroom #year
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The current
education
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system
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 consists students, a
teacher
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 and a classroom. Many believe, that
this
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system
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 may not exist in
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future
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the future
. The current idea of a
teacher
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 giving lectures to many
student
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students
 in a classroom may become obsolete.
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 of all we must understand the current
education
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system
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 we are talking about and why
this
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system
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 may face extinction. I do agree that we will see a
lots
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lot
 of changes in
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education
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the education system
system
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 in near
future
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.
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, I do not think that the entire
system
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 will be replaced by a new one. By the year 2050, there will be lots of
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inclusions
 in the field of technology. Due to these new inventions, our life will be easier. Technological advancement will
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 affect our
education
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system
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. We may see digital classrooms in
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future
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the future
, where
physical presence
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the physical presence
 of a
teacher
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 is no longer required.
Instead
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 of attending a lecture in a classroom, students can
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 study from home in front of their computers. In my opinion,
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future
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the future education system
education
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system
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 will not be location dependent.
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, the key members like students and
teacher
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 will be there. In conclusion, I think there will be a
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lot
 of changes in
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education
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the education system
system
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 by the year 2050. I think those changes will bring a lot of positive aspects in the field of
education
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual reality
  • augmented reality
  • traditional teaching methods
  • personalized learning
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • global connectivity
  • online platforms
  • obsolete
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • digital classrooms
  • economic factors
  • maintaining physical school buildings
  • online learning environments
  • social interaction
  • practical learning experiences
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