We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is undeniable that people
couldnot
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could not
help
everone
all people
everyone
around the globe at the time of need
,
Accept space
,
but they could serve their own community as well as the nation. Getting access to the needy people at a
distant
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distance
away and assisting them is usually achieved by government authorities and local people could hardly reach them.
Besides
this
, it is advisable to share the burden of peers at hard times, living within the
vacinity
a surrounding or nearby region
vicinity
. I strongly agree with
this
thought but
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thought, but
higher officials, having easy access to resources could come to
front
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the front
at the time of need to aid the needful.
First
of all, people living around are considered as
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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