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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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Overpopulation and urbanization has
lead
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led
 to loss of natural habitat.
Fostering
Suggestion
The fostering
 of tourism and protection of environment are key benefits produced by preserving the natural beauty spots.
discouragment
Suggestion
Discouragement
Discouragment
 of
industralization
the development of industry on an extensive scale
industrialization
industrialisation
 is the
manadatory
required by rule
mandatory
 step to be taken to solve
this
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 issue of losing natural and exquisite places.
Firstly
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, by protecting natural beauty, countries can strengthen their economy by tourism.
For instance
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, in Pakistan, swat is considered eminent in terms of tourism destination, attracting
plethora
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a plethora
 of visitors from national and international backgrounds.
Subsequently
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, contributing
to
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To
 major
porportion
the quotient obtained when the magnitude of a part is divided by the magnitude of the whole
proportion
 of economy.
Secondly
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, PRESERVING NATURE LEADS TO ENVIRONMENTAL
protection leading
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protection, leading
 to long term health benefits, AS AN ILLUSTRATION, statistics
revelead
make visible
revealed
, early morning walk in
greenry
green foliage
greenery
 has a
pramount
having superior power and influence
paramount
prominent
 beneficial impact on health.
Hence
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, protecting natural
inhabitat
a person who inhabits a particular place
inhabitant
 is
necessaryfor
Suggestion
necessary for
 healthy human race. Countries can curb the alarming issue of losing natural beauty spots by discouraging
industralization
the development of industry on an extensive scale
industrialization
industrialisation
.
For instance
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,
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