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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
Education system
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The education system
 has changed drastically over the years among all parts of the world. It is considered by many that
university
admission
 has become challenging for both the wealthy and the underprivileged.
This
 essay will argue why getting into
university
 is tough regardless of the economic condition. The main reason is that
admission
 to most universities has grown extremely competitive. They have raised their entrance requirements when selecting application. By
this
 I mean higher grades and test scores in high school and in
entrance examination
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the entrance examination
 respectively. According to an article in NewYork Times, the average GPA among admitted students
last
 year was higher than 4.0 with SAT score of 2140.
This
 shows that the applicants will have a harder time as the competition for
admission
 is only expected to intensify.
Although
 many qualified students will face hardship, few may easily get through by donation and quotas. Whether the
university
 is private or state-funded, all of them have some seats reserved in management and underprivileged quota.
For example
, the management seat
in
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at
 Harvard
University
 for the Business Analysts course can be brought for one million US dollars.
In addition
, it admits poor students belonging to minority community if they had outperformed their academic studies. Overall, the
university
admission
 is
troublesome but
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troublesome, but
 very few may get through smoothly.
This
 essay argued that why people found it difficult to get
admission
 in
university
 irrespective of their financial condition. I would like to conclude that
university
admission
 these days are tough and will become tougher with time as competition increases.
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