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More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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The increasing variety of
household
 goods has been recognized as an unstoppable trend, yet argument regarding its necessity or rationality seems not to be ceased. In fact, many believe that
such
 excessive growth is merely a reflection profound influence of consumerism, of which
i
of me or myself
my
I
second
. The intension of cyclical consumer products industry was upstanding: to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 various demands and create a better and more convenient living condition. Driven by
this
 vision, the scale of
this
 industry soared in the
last
 century, and managed to add various
household
 appliances, ranging from traditional ones
such
 as washing machines and electrical tin openers to stylish devices
such
 as flat- screen television and sweeping robots, into our life. Indeed, these items allow us to pay more attention to other important aspects in life, and
also
 plays a significant role
of
Suggestion
in
 a country's economy, which will
then
 assist the promotion and popularization of
these merchandises
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this merchandise
.
This
 circulation runs smoothly for years, until the rise of consumerism. Consumerism refers to an ideology that encourages the acquisition of goods in ever-increasing amounts, which will eventually make customers purchasing items related to the display of status and not to functionality or usefulness. With its influence, consumers may end up sacrificing significant time and income not only to purchase but
also
 to actively support a certain firm or brand. Needless to say,
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 should be acknowledged as a direct contradiction to the original purpose of having more
household
 goods, expensive or even luxury, may highly likely capture people's full attention. Without disdain the benefits brought by
household
 goods, it may not be wise to possess as as
such
 considerable amount of these articles, sometime quite many these goods as possible

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