Many people are spending lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good think?

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Celebrating a luxurious wedding is a new trend in
modern era
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the modern era
. It loses not only the economic growth but
also
a huge energy and mental level. I highly disagree with
this
trend
also
think,
that is
not a wisdom.
First
of all, we have to find out the main reason behind that prone. In modern technological life, people are very used to in
social media application
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a social media application
like
facebook
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Facebook
, Instagram,
whatsapp
etc.
nowadays
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Nowadays
you can easily see that there are lots of
facebook
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Facebook
pages and
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pages, and
events who gives
offer
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an offer
to
organized
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organize
a great wedding. There are lots of bridal packages included there along with a great photography event. Specially girls, are getting attracted by those packages. Those organizations post lots of
weeding
the social event at which the ceremony of marriage is performed
wedding
photos with very special style that inspired specially girls a lot. It is like a show off trend that if we are not arranging a luxurious
weeding
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wedding, then
wedding then
then
what will our friends and family tell.
On the contrary
, a luxurious weeding is very expensive. Sometimes, the photographers demand one
lakh
or more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
that just for a photography event.
Also
the decoration part has an enormous cost just it’s only. Because, the main attraction for a great weeding is decoration.
On the other hand
,
parlor
reception room in an inn or club where visitors can be received
parlour
cost including
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cost, including
a huge number day by day. Girls are very addicted to give herself a beautiful look. Ok,
this
is fine, every girl want that she will look special at her big day. But, the thing is most of the
parlor
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poles
polar
pole
polarity
of the city use adulteration product which causes harm to skin disease and
also
demand a high remuneration. In the middle class family, the impact of
this
fact is very dangerous. Because a father wants to
gives
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give
his best for his daughter and son. But,
such
amount of cost always falls him a frustration. In the end, I can say that a luxurious wedding is a dream for all but the result of
this
situation may not be cool for any developing country. Only the increasing of awareness among citizens can eliminate
this
economic and mental lose.
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  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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