Many people are spending lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good think?

#people #money #weddings

Celebrating a luxurious wedding is a new trend in

modern era

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the modern era

. It loses not only the economic growth but

also

a huge energy and mental level. I highly disagree with

this

trend

also

think,

that is

not a wisdom.

First

of all, we have to find out the main reason behind that prone. In modern technological life, people are very used to in

social media application

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a social media application

facebook

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Facebook

, Instagram,

etc.

nowadays

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Nowadays

you can easily see that there are lots of

facebook

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Facebook

pages and

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pages, and

events who gives

offer

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an offer

organized

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organize

a great wedding. There are lots of bridal packages included there along with a great photography event. Specially girls, are getting attracted by those packages. Those organizations post lots of

weeding

the social event at which the ceremony of marriage is performed

wedding

photos with very special style that inspired specially girls a lot. It is like a show off trend that if we are not arranging a luxurious

weeding

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wedding, then

wedding then

then

what will our friends and family tell.

On the contrary

, a luxurious weeding is very expensive. Sometimes, the photographers demand one

lakh

or more

then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

that just for a photography event.

Also

the decoration part has an enormous cost just it’s only. Because, the main attraction for a great weeding is decoration.

On the other hand

parlor

reception room in an inn or club where visitors can be received

parlour

cost including

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cost, including

a huge number day by day. Girls are very addicted to give herself a beautiful look. Ok,

this

is fine, every girl want that she will look special at her big day. But, the thing is most of the

parlor

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poles

polar

pole

polarity

of the city use adulteration product which causes harm to skin disease and

also

demand a high remuneration. In the middle class family, the impact of

this

fact is very dangerous. Because a father wants to

gives

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give

his best for his daughter and son. But,

such

amount of cost always falls him a frustration. In the end, I can say that a luxurious wedding is a dream for all but the result of

this

situation may not be cool for any developing country. Only the increasing of awareness among citizens can eliminate

this

economic and mental lose.

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Many people are spending lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good think?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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