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Topic 21: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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Nowadays, some people claim that it is better for children to grow up in the
countryside
 than in a big
city
. While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree that living in the
countryside
 brings many good things of our
children
Suggestion
child
child's
children's
 development
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that living in the big
city
 is equally useful. On the one hand,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree that it is better for children grow up in the
countryside
.
Firstly
, children need good
healthy
Suggestion
health
, they require fresh air and not polluted by the huge amount of cars and factories in the modern
city
.
Secondly
, in the country where the children can spend more time communicating with their friends and
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
instead
 of watching television, playing games and so on. That helps them to improve community life.
Finally
, the children should live in a healthy environment, fewer crimes and a gang of narcotic addicts a lieu of a place that there are many dangers of crime and deprived culture like big cities to protect them from dangers, negative influence and improve their human dignity.
On the other hand
, the children live in a big
city
 is very useful because there are many
convenience
Suggestion
conveniences
 for studying, working, entertainment and so on. When the children live there, they can a high standard of education, there are many chances to explore everything from practice trips so they can have wide knowledge.
Besides
, a big
city
 usually has many entertaining
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 with movie theatres and play stations, the children can relax after hard lessons. That makes make them have a good health and grow well.
Moreover
, living in a big
city
 has facilities for health when they are ill because there are a lot of hospitals that we can take them to here quickly than in the
countryside
. In conclusion, in my perspective, the children should live in a big
city
 because of benefits that can
helps
Suggestion
help
 them grow up better than living in the
countryside
 - a place has some restriction on learning, entertainment, medical stations and so on.
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