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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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 the old adage about everything coming in three’s is true, 2014 Bordeaux is set to be the
next
 great vintage. Even though it’s still early, based on the 2013 Bordeaux growing season, harvest and condition of the grapes, 2013 Bordeaux is not going to be considered one of the great years. Since the 1980’s Bordeaux buyers have become spoiled with vintage after vintage of good to great years. Historically, that has never been the case. A quick reminder about previous decades illustrates that fact. Remember the 70’s? What about the 60’s with 63, 65, 67, 68, 69… Or the 50’s, 51, 52, 54, 56, 56, 57, 58. The run of bad of vintages from the 30’s and 40’s remains
unequaled
radically distinctive and without equal
unequalled
. With the exception of 1934, which was
good but
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good, but
 not great, have you taste 1930, 31, 32, 33, 35, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40, 41, 42, 43 or 1944 lately? Running later than expected, the 2013 Bordeaux harvest was still a few weeks away. But that did not stop the enthusiastic crowd celebrating the 2013 Bordeaux vintage at Domaine de Chevalier, even though it drenched The Ban
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 Vendages celebration on September 14. As bad as 2013 looks, there will be producers with the time, money, drive, technology and
terroir
an overwhelming feeling of fear and anxiety
terror
 that can make fine wine from the difficult 2013 Bordeaux vintage. If we were back in the 1990’s, a year like
this
 would be a complete washout, similar to what took place in 1991 or 1992. But that will not be the case today, as the top estates will produce a small quantity of fine wine. Read more at
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