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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that the eating habits of children and their lifestyle has changed tremendously as compared to the past generations which had created a detrimental effect on their health. I totally agree with
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 statement. Nowadays, children are more likely to intake fast foods. In
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 way, they are abiding the consumption of home cooked
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. Even though, kids are familiar about the health hazards created by fast
food
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. But, their attraction towards it has increased rapidly as compared to the past. On
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the other hand
, the advertisement of
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 products in television, radio has greatly influenced people.
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, due to the busy schedule of the parents.
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In spite
 of preparing home cooked
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,
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,
they even provide some snacks
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for
 their children. As a consequence, their
children even
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children, even
 lack nutritious
food
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 in their meal. So, that
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 tendency
automatically decrease
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automatically decreases
 their immunity power.
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, the intake of carbohydrates has increased these days as children consume more cold drinks and chocolates.
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has induce
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has induced
 a problem of obesity. In the process of getting healthy lifestyle
children even
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children, even
 skip their breakfast.
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, due to the laziness behaviour of children, they are more prone to sleep for long hours in the morning rather than doing exercise.
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, their minds get dull.
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hand they
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hand, they
 could remain physically and mentally ill.
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, we can conclude that the previous
generations people
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generations, people
 are more healthy as compared to now.
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