Taking care of children is probably one of the most important jobs of society and parents should be forced to take training courses showing them how to do so. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Children are the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
world for their parents.
Although
, many people
believes
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believe
that caring
of
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for
children is one of the most significant jobs of society and parents have to take training classes for the same jobs. I would discuss the
point regarding to
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point regarding
the statement. And I
am partailly agree
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partially agree
am partially agree
have partially agreed
am partly agree
with the statement. In the modern generation,
childern
a young person of either sex
children
are so advance,
emtional
determined or actuated by emotion rather than reason
emotional
and easy to distract. Nowadays,
environment
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the environment
becomes so nasty or dirty people are so mean and provide bad influence on the
childern
a young person of either sex
children
. So
,
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,
parents need to teach and
care
the
childern
a young person of either sex
children
to make long distance from from these
type
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types
of people. Apart from
this
, technology
also
influence their
childern which
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children, which
children which
directly impacted on their brain.
Thus
, parents take a training course to handle their
child
in different type of situations.
Furthermore
, parents
to take
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take
classes in a
such
a way that
childern
a young person of either sex
children
never hesitate in telling the truth and opinions.
On the other hand
, parents are so busy in the fast forward where they do not have much time to take
care
of their
child
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children
.
Moreover
, either grandparents or nanny taking
care
of the
childern
a young person of either sex
children
. In
this
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scenario
scenery
, parents do not have any
requirment
required activity
requirement
requirements
to take those
type
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types
of training courses. And
grandsparents
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grands parents
are not that much capable to take these sources. And Some parents are well educated and they have
aboundence
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an abundance
abundance
of knowledge
to
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of
how to
care
provide a cure for, make healthy again
cure
their
child
.
Thus
, I stop to
writing
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write
and say that some people have to take training course which help to them for better caring of their
child
. And other parents where grandparents taking
care
of their
grand sons
a male grandchild
grandsons
or daughter.
they
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They
do not need any training
coureses
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
. In the broad way, it totally depends on the parents.
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