More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the price of fast food will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Obesity is a most common problem for any person. People are becoming obsessed to consume fast
food
because those foods are attractive and delicious. But raising
price
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the price
of fast
food
is not the only solution to remedy
this
problem. I think, building awareness among people is crucial to get a solution. At present days, eating fast
food
tendency is shown more in
young generation
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the young generation
and
employer
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employment
. Many of employee
eat
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eats
fast
food
at their lunch
time
for
time
-saving.
Also
, some junk
food
like, chips,
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like chips,
Burger, Sandwich, Pizza etc.
are
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Are
more easy
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easier
to get from any shop.
people
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People
do not have to wait for
long
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a long time
time
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, it is very
time
consuming.
Moreover
, the restaurants at present, give lots of offer on those foods which attract
majority
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the majority
of
student
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students
including
also
student offer. But
this
is not only the reason behind gaining weight.
to
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To
sit for a long
time
and do not do any exercise is
also
reason
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the reason
a reason
of fatness or overweight.
Employee
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An employee
who
works that’s
Accept comma addition
works, that’s
kind of work where he or she has to sit for a long
time
causes overweight along with back pain. In
this
case, only increasing cost
in
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of
food
not the only solution, awareness is needed that which
food
we should eat in which
time
and how much. One should divide or make a routine about taking
food
.
Also
, who has already overweight should avoid eating lots of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
and sweet foods. But
this
is not
also
ignorable
to raise
price
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prices
in fast
food
. May be people will get
demotivate
to consume it,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
student
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the student
. The most important thing is whatever we eat, we should always keep some
time
to do exercise.
This
is not necessary to go
for
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to
jimesiam
athletic facility equipped for sports or physical training
gymnasium
every
time
. The normal walking and free hand exercise which
have
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has
lots of
benefit
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benefits
to keep someone slim and fit. To conclude, the government
should to do
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should do
some campaign to build awareness among people, to show the bad side of fast
food
and inspire be healthy and live disease free.
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