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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #clothes
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A large majority of people, either consciously or subconsciously, judge other people by the "cover". I believe that making
judgement
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a judgement
 about someone's cultural background and beliefs is feasible;
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,
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's speculations about other's personality traits will be pure conjecture. Making
judgement
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a judgement
 about cultural backgrounds based on people's clothing is usually not impossible. Clothes in vibrant
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
 are usually associated with happy cultures.
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as
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 a result, people tend to assume that a person wearing a bright garment is most likely related to a happy cultural background.
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, my youngest uncle's family are of a happy disposition and
this
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 is almost obviously reflected in their clothing style. Or take a Muslim woman as an example. They tend to wear hijab and their clothes are usually loose and in darker
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
. So most people would realize that the person wearing
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 clothes is likely to come from a devout Muslim family.
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, clothing can be quite disingenuous in telling us about personality traits of people, since seeing someone with casual clothes at a formal party does not always convey they are disrespectful or inconsiderate.
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 case might be solely because he or she felt close to the others attending the party and thought everyone would wear casual clothes. Another good example could be the case of
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 of my friends who was studying for a master's in electrical engineering. Seeing him in not-so-neat clothes, many would have guessed he
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was
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 of the janitors at the university, but he graduated cum laude and went on to study for a PhD the year after. To sum up,
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 cannot say much about a person's make-up
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for
 how they are clothed,
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 people's outfit might reveal some information about their culture.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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