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The threat of nuclear power weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clear energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages

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Since the innovation of nuclear generators, many countries have been reaping the merits. It is considered true that many nations around the universe with nuclear
power
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 have harnessed it to maintain world unity as well as to generate
pure source
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a pure source
 of electricity. I strongly agree that the benefits of nuclear
power
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 outweigh the demerits. Nuclear plants,
first
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 and foremost, can generate a large unit of megawatts when compared to solar, hydropower and gas plants. To put it another way, a nuclear
power
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 plant due to the reactor present, can
power
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 about a thousand homes in a community. What is more,
this
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generators
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generator
 can produce
pure source
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a pure source
 of
energy
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in contrast
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 to other types of electricity plant which can cause greenhouse emissions. A good case point can be seen in Kenya, who now generates 50,000 megawatts
from
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of
 nuclear
power
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 as oppose to 7.500 megawatts produced from solar
energy
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.
Thus
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, I think the merit of nuclear technologies is
undisputed
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undisputedly
 and very important to
power
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 generation. In the alternate view, maintaining a nuclear plant is very
expensive especially
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expensive, especially
 to developing countries. So, funds directed to
this
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 plan can be redirected to building of schools, hospitals and good roads.
For instance
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, the government of Iraq estimates that 28 million dollars, will be spent to start the country’s nuclear program.
Although
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,
this
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 can be seen to be wasteful. I think the advantage in terms of
energy
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 production,
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 improvements, production of jet engines, submarines and in the treatment of cancers cannot be overemphasized. On the whole,
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 both part the nuclear reactors as helped to ensured uncontaminated
energy
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 production, which as
also
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 reduced greenhouse gases.
Moreso
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Morrison
, the development of jet engines, submarines and in the field of medicine is not without the help of nuclear technologies.
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, it is no
gain say
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gainsaying
gainsay
 that the advantages of nuclear plants
is
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are
 more than the demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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