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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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A good mental and physical development process of a child always comes along with great efforts of his
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her parents, family members and teachers.
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, there’s a controversial topic
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 people that a child should focus on reading or doing amusing activities to be fully developed. From my point of view, the activities are more important to a child.
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 of all, thanks to many scientists, we now know that people often remember extreme emotions
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come into existence; take on form or shape
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 from activities or events more clear than other kinds of memories.
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 reading a book can help children improve their language skills and develop good imagination skills, it would be hard to create
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 extreme emotions to the kids like activities or events do. Without being well remembered, reading books seems to be a
flavor
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
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 to childhood rather than a strong method to help parents develop their children skills and emotions.
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, in a fast moving and dynamic modern
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, personal skills and creative thinkings are more related to interactive and social skills that a
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 learned
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from
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her earlier
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 the childhood period is very important to build
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 skills for a
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. And the best way for he
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she to learn those skills are to play and interact with his
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her peers, parents or others through activities. Books are
good source
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a good source
 of studying, but they won’t tell kids how to behave to others as well as real
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 situations and activities. In summary, it’s obvious that childhood memories come along with each
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 for all of his
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her
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. Those memories can
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 affect the way that
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 behave to others or deal with situations when he
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she grow up. And the best way to build
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 memories as well as skills for children is to create and play enjoyable
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any specific behavior
activities
 with them from the start. Books are
good but
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good, but
 should be deemed to a better source for training more mature people, not for kids.

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