At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

It is well known that some countries have a
population
with more young people than old people. Even
this
fact could have both advantages and disadvantages, In my opinion the positive implications of having a youthful
population
over-weigh the negative ones.
This
essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages giving examples to support both
point
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points
of view. On one hand, having
more younger
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younger
people could lead to a lack of professionals in the society. Older
population
may be more educated than
the young
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the younger
one,
this
is being why they have had more time to study a professional career during their lives.
For example
, to become a specialist physician it is needed at least 10 years of university studies and
this
may not be able for a young adult yet.
In addition
, younger
population
have
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has
less life experience than
old
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older
population
. People after their 50’s may have been through a lot in life and they may be more prepared to solve any day-life problem than younger people.
This
could help to form a less stressful society.
Lastly
, younger populations
are
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is
likely to have
higher rate
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higher rates
a higher rate
of crime,
this
could be because young people have more energy to commit crime than old people. A study from the University of Chile showed that in the south of Chile, where the
population
is mostly young, the rate of robs and crimes where twice higher than in the north where most of the
population
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
in their 50’s and older.
On the other hand
, youthful populations are in general more active and
more happy
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happier
.
This
may be because they have less old age-associated illness leading them to work more and maintain them-self more active. Adding to the fact that healthy people can work more efficiently, with
this
they can contribute to the economy of the country, making money
instead
of spending.
For instance
, it is a fact that old societies spend a lot of money in health for their
old
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older
citizens. Another positive aspect of having young adult populations is that there are more chances of having outstanding sport professionals. Young people have more time and more energy than
old
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older
people to practice and become an excellent
sport
the activity of providing for or maintaining by supplying with money or necessities
support
professional. In soccer most of the
players
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player
retires from their soccer-career when they turn thirty years old. With old people there would be no time to start a sport career. And
last
but not least, young societies are more likely to have outdoor activities for the community.
This
could be because they are more proactive in
organize
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organizing
those
plural of "this"
these
activities and
also
more likely to participate in them.
Old
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Older
people may be too tired to go out. To conclude with the arguments given above, I firmly believe that the advantages of
youthful
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the youthful population
population
over-weigh the disadvantages. Even though, there are some positive aspects of having an older
population
that
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That
we should consider.

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