Nowadays many people believe that children should be taught history in schools, however, others argue that children should learn subjects that are more helpful for modern everyday life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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School is a place where children can develop their mental abilities, which would help them to get succeed in their life. Numerous people
believes
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believe
teaching a subject about
past
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the past
would give wisdom about that time, while others think that knowledge about modern era is more important. I discuss and elucidate both the views in following paragraph. To embark upon, optimum school schedules have history subject to teach children about ancestor time, which provides information related to historical persons and places.
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, students learn various things about historical events, records and development.
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, seventh wonder of the world “The
taj
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Taj
mahal
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Mahal
” is a remarkable and antique building, and it has historical evidence about the king who built
this
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building.
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, a period about former times could teach
a
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an
adolescent all about that time so they could respect and get motivated from all old days.
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, subjects related to modern era are
also
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crucial
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similarly
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similarities
similar
. To grow in today’s world teenagers should focus not only on contemporary
courses but
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courses, but
also
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on technical practices to become all rounder.
Such
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as, doctors and engineers need a remarkable practice with theory subjects. Owing to
this
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, they could become successful in
future
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the future
and would get
respectable position
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a respectable position
in society. In conclusion, according to me historical
specialism
an expert who is devoted to one occupation or branch of learning
specialist
would help youngsters
to get
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get
more awareness about their old ages, which would enhance their respect towards
old
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older
people, but reading about modern era is equally important to match the pace of the world and to get
honored
having an illustrious reputation; respected
honoured
hammered
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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