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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to take time off work. In your letter give details of the amount of time you need. In your letter suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

#company #time #work #manager #amount
Dear Mr Bond, I'm Serkan who works for
retailing
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the retailing
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 department. I want to share my necessary request
to
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 you. That's why I write
this
 letter. In
next
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 5
days
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 I need time off
work
. Cause of that my child is sick. He is at the hospital with his mother.
However
, they may need some assistance from me. He is could need my help while he is resting at
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he
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 hospital.
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have
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 to buy some food or water.
Additionally
, they need clean clothes too. By reason of
this
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 I want to some off
days
 of
work
.
Also
, our doctor said that
,
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 5
days
 is enough for
recovery
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the recovery
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 of my child.
Therefore
, 5
days
 off
work
 is enough for me. I want to suggest something for recovering my
work
. When I start working at
company
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 I can fill my duties at the weekends. I would resolve our companies works on
this
work
 shift. I wish you could give me some off
days
work
. Sincerely yours.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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