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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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It is often thought that
internet
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the internet
 is a great source of awareness
to
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for
 people all over the globe. Apart from offering free knowledge, it can
also
 be observed that it bridges the gap in
distant
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distance
 learning and makes communication easier for people. One major benefit of the
internet
 is that it creates an avenue where people can attend a foreign university online without being there physically. It helps people
to save
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save
 the time, finances and disappointments associated with the pursuit of a foreign Visa.
Additionally
, people can communicate easily with their friends and family without any physical contact.
For instance
, the use of Facebook and other social media aids faster communications.
On the other hand
, it is considered as being detrimental to the society because it increases social vices and criminality among youths.
This
 may be clearly seen with the trending case of the fraud committed by Nigerian youths in Dubai recently.
Furthermore
, quite a number of teenagers now engage in pornography rather than their study.
For instance
, In a recent study which took in a university located
at
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in
 Abuja, it was deduced that the majority of students who visit pornographic sites, were more likely to be unsuccessful in their academics. In conclusion, while
internet
 might be seen as
huge source
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a huge source
 of knowledge, its disadvantages
such
 as increased
internet
 fraud and pornography are inconceivable to the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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