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Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued whether doing sports activities helps children become competitive or develop
teamwork
Suggestion
a teamwork sense
sense
 of
collaboration
. I believe that sports teach them both things, and in
this
 essay, it will be discussed why many sports stimulate the
sense
 of
competition
 or
collaboration
in
Suggestion
with
 children Sports
competition
 is quite common, and people often enjoy it.
Firstly
, many sports are organised in hierarchic scales, telling people who are at the bottom ranks that they are not as good as those at
the high
Suggestion
the highest
higher
the higher
 levels.
As a result
, people who choose those
sport
Suggestion
sports
such
 as martial arts or even football
develop
Suggestion
develops
 a
sense
 of
competition
 because by achieving high graded they will be proving your worth to themselves and their peers. A recent study revealed that 60% of school football players felt the highest satisfaction when they proved to be technically superior to other players.
On the other hand
, teamwork is fundamental to maintain a cheerful atmosphere and help a person progress. Children who play sports in a team or individually want to feel part of a group because it gives them a
sense
 of purpose and they make them happier and more motivated.
For example
, if the team is constituted of 2 people, the teacher and the student, teamwork occurs, and only if there is
collaboration
 between the parts progress can occur, cheering up the parts.
For example
, a recent survey has concluded people involved in sports activities were more 20% more likely to volunteer and
therefore
 cooperate to help others.
This
 was especially true for people who were involved in team sports
such
 as volleyball or football. In conclusion, there is evidence that practising sport involves both
competition
 and cooperation, even though some sports can be more based on
competition
 or
collaboration

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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