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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced.

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Nowadays, Exploring universe is becoming popular because of growing machinery and greater enhancements in advanced tools. For many countries, especially developed and under developed nations are allocating more budget to
study
 the solar system in depth.
However
, there are both pros and cons of spending money on
this
. I will completely agree that
this
 mission should be continued
further
 to improve
technology
 to a greater extent or the
next
 level. Owing to the
technology
 change, Demand for the source of many materials, increasing and to overcome
this
space
 exploration is must. Even though the huge amount spends on mission, the data collected and transmitted to earth has valuable insights. Many scientific theories produced are the result of a
study
space
.
Accept space
.
Instance, Due to
space
 exploration now scientist is able to
study
 about black hole theory and prove Newton's work are not real. In their
study
, they are able to find faster materials than the speed of light.
Also
 nowadays it has made possible to forecast weather reports in advance and provide greater internet connectivity.
For Example
, Now companies have started implementing 5G
technology
 for smooth connection.
Instead
 to reduce missions the rockets, re-usability can be made possible.
For example
 SpaceX founded by Elon Musk recently launched a Falcon heavy vehicle which carries satellites into
space
 and performs safe landing of rockets which will make cheaper. To conclude, Money spent on
space
 has greater advantage since it helps to improve
technology
 and develop more advanced theories and to forecast weather report.
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